新航道

  新航道SAT小編帶來了關于面對2019年12月SAT考試，寫作“磨槍抱腳”之一二技(二)。

  「Reading Passage 1」

  SAT北美考區2016年11月寫作真題

  Bad for the Birds, Bad for All of Us

  寫作范文

  以我們的作文的(主體部分的)第一個段落(應對材料文的第一、二段)為例，主要學習兩個關鍵寫作內容：

  ● 對于材料文內容的Summary(文中紅色部分)

  ● 對于材料文寫作的Analysis(文中藍色部分)

  The essay begins with a rather straightforward statement that America’s declining bird populations are an early warning of much bigger ecosystem disruptions that would be consequential to the whole country. Warned by the decline, the author then points out that America should make more efforts to protect the habitats of birds—America’s farms and ranches. At this point, the author uses a technique—personification: the call for help and protection, as “(the birds)’re telling us that we need to do more. Paragraph Two specifies about the population plunge by naming two species, Eastern Meadowlark and Henslow’s Sparrow, which have suffered immense diminishing populations. The slumps are well substantiated by the alarming statistical facts as indisputable evidence.

  小總結：

  在我們的作文里Analysis的內容篇幅不一定就是要多于Summary，全看材料文是什么樣的了。

  再以我們的作文的(主體部分的)第二個段落(應對材料文的第三、四、五、六、七、八段)為例：

  ● 對于材料文內容的Summary(文中紅色部分)

  ● 對于材料文寫作的Analysis(文中藍色部分)

  The author remains optimistic in the face of the ecological adversity, as he sees “bright spots”. He points out that the rebounding local sub-population, exemplified by the tremendous growth in the Henslow’s Sparrows’ population, is credited to Conservation Reserve Program (CRP), and, by quoting a report and using diverse statistics—percentages, sizes and numbers, the author then recognizes the many other remarkable achievements of the farm bill CRP, such as encouraging landowners to adopt sustainable farming and breeding and expanding bird habitat. However, there is a turning of the situation, as the authors says the “gains are at risk” in the single-sentence Paragraph 6. Through the transition, the author moves to the crisis the farm bill faces, which are the political divergence and the political powers’ financial act that will lead to the serious shrinkage of conservation reserve lands.

  小總結：

  1)我們的作文雖然可能覆蓋材料文的多個段落和極大篇幅，但是我們自己的作文的篇幅不一樣就對應的很長。

  2)我們自己的作文在分析的時候，可能分析作者的態度(remains optimistic)、論證方式(exemplify，quoting a report and using diverse statistics)、材料文的結構和脈絡 (a turning of the situation, the transition, moves to)。

  以我們的作文的(主體部分的)第三個段落(應對材料文的第九、十、十一、十二段)為例：

  ● 對于材料文內容的Summary(文中紅色部分)

  ● 對于材料文寫作的Analysis(文中藍色部分)

  As is stated clearly, the influence of CRPs extends beyond the benefits for birds and to agriculture, as many CRPs promote and pay for the transitioning to sustainable agriculture. The author uses an example that water is cleansed and purified in which specific numbers are given to illustrate the benefit. Immediately, the author points out the current wide coverage of CRPs is however inadequate, since there are still a number of problems—the case of the plantings in the Corn Belt and the dreadful depletion of oxygen in the waters of the Gulf of Mexico as examples. Further, it is suggested that the 2013 farm bill plays a pivotal role in the existence of reserve programs of other types of lands and decides the federal government’s longtime dedication to farmland conservation. In Paragraph 12, it is suggested that the farm bill is much needed by American farms, and the high popularity of the bill is illustrated by the case that new landowner sign-ups for the funding typically exceed the governmental quota.

  小總結：

  我們自己的作文在分析的時候，會遇到一些模棱兩可的界于summary和analysis之間的內容(黃色高亮部分)，這一部分內容不是純粹的材料文的內容概要，但也不是我們從讀者的角度作出的外部分析，而是一種“解讀：穿透材料文作者的字面意思，去理解作者的潛臺詞和暗示”。

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