新航道

  雅思寫作是中國考生們的一大頭疼科目，也是難以提高的科目。新航道章躍老師就針對雅思寫作這塊，尤其是小作文，給大家分享以5月18日小作文真題為例，關于數據體現出來的事實該如何寫，希望能對即將要參加考試的烤鴨們有所幫助!

  2019年5月18日雅思小作文題目

  國內(A類)：折線圖

  高分范文及解析

  以美國和韓國的那兩條線為例。這樣寫：

  America’s urban population has gradually grown to 80 percent, and it is forecast to grow further and slowly to 82 percent. In South Korea, the early 40-year period witnessed a surge from 40 percent to 76 percent. Since 2010, the growth has been sluggish, and, by 2030, the urban population is projected to account for 80 percent of the country’s total population.

  真的就好了么?

  是不是慌了?

  應該的。因為那是屬于“機械描述數據”的高級水平(當然，你能掌握就已經很值得表揚了)。

  其實，“描述數據體現出來的事實”才是高能(高分)。

  同樣是這兩條線，理想的寫法是這樣的：

  Although South Korea started at a relatively low level (40 percent), the country kept catching up with the US at a rapid rate and achieved the same high level of urbanization (nearly 80 percent) in 2010, whereas the US, during the same 40-year period, saw a slow growth in the percentage of urban population. A neck-and-neck situation has since been witnessed, and a continuation is anticipated.

  發現了區別沒有?

  主要的區別在于對于數據的描述不是那么直接的寫成“某某數值如何上漲”，而是寫出一種“事件感”。這種“事件感”就是“描述數據體現出來的事實”。

  我們再以《胡敏雅思第七代教材(高能版)》Page 95的表格里的部分信息為例，體會“描述數據體現出來的事實” (describe what the statistics represent / indicate) 這個“高能”寫法：

  The four countries’ travelers are most likely to drive and least likely to cycle. However, the Netherlands is an exception in the use of bicycles, as cycling is a popular means of transport just after driving, making roughly a quarter of all trips. The country is also noticeable for cars, the chief means of traveling, makes barely half of people’s journeys. In addition, Americans’ heavy reliance on cars is also noteworthy, since as many as 90 percent of journeys are made by car.

  是不是沒有“用機械無聊的方式說出這個數字是多少那個數字是多少”?那叫“機械描述數據”(當然，如果你的機械描述看起來“熟練準確高效且有多樣的語法和詞匯”，分數也會不錯)。

  如果，至此，你覺得“描述數據體現出來的事實”，那你可能需要一個措辭簡單卻仍然是描述數據體現出來的事實這個行文思路的版本。

  以上就是關于雅思寫作小作文的數據體現出來的事實的寫作范文，更多資訊，請關雅思頻道 。