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  The bar chart below shows the number (million) of four kinds of materials borrowed from a particular library in the UK between 1995 and 2005.

  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

  高分范文及解析：

  跨年份，時間不連續，不能當成線

  所以，寫作過程中注意“比較”。

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  黑色字體為學生習作;橘紅色字體為教師批改

  The bar chart gives the information of about situations the loans of four kinds of materials from a particular library in the UK loaned four kinds of materials from 1995 to 2005 in three separate years, which are 1995, 2000 and 2005.【注意：時間不連續，避免from … to …】

  The number The average frequency of Audio-Visual Materials audiovisual materials was at almost the same levels in the three years, Children's Book and【三個項目拆開來寫之后，就有了倒裝句的機會：】 so were that of children's books and Adult Non-Fiction that of adult non-fiction. borrowed from the library was almost unchanged between 1995 and 2005【注意：由于時間不連續，避免寫出線圖感。】The low frequency of audiovisual materials is particularly notable,【善用狀語從句引出具體數值：】since the largest number, which was in 2005, was merely 30 million. that Children’s books and adult non-fiction were at the level of roughly 100 million times and 200 million times respectively. lent roughly 10 times of the amount of Audio-Visual Materials: 200millions, also the maximum across three materials, compared with 20millions, the minimum. Meanwhile, the group in the middle was lent basically the same amount 100millins which was stable during the 10-years period.【要敢于“舍”。】

  It is notable that the 10-years period witnessed sliding numbers in terms of Children's Book borrowed from the library.【注意：由于時間不連續，避免寫出線圖感。】To put the three years together, there was a slip in the number of times adult fiction was borrowed. There was a sluggish slide from 310 million to 210 million, then it slumped to one third of the original level 100millions, the point children's books' number was reached. Noticeably, during the plunge, adult fiction fell below adult non-fiction. The year of 1995 witnessed the largest number, which was more than 300 million. The other two years are also noteworthy,【善用狀語從句引出具體數值：】as the year of 2000 saw the same number as that of adult non-fiction and the year of 2005 witnessed the same number as that of children's books.

  Overall, the numbers of those materials borrowed from the library is were rather stable except the number of adult fiction books.